Wednesday, August 25, 2010

Abandonment

The kitten meows pitifully. “Who will take her for the night?” Guiltily glancing at one another, we all make our excuses and turn away.

2 comments:

  1. I selected this post because of the ones I wrote it most resembled a story. I tended to lean toward writing in a more poetic style given the word limit.

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  2. I like that it's really focused on the gesture, turning away. I wonder if the act could be trusted to have the emotional impact you want without the assistance of the telling title or the adverbs "pitifully" or "guiltily." Given a minimum of context, that is, even a small gesture can communicate a mood.

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