I picked this one simply because I felt that it said the most. I'm a wordy person myself when it comes to writing, so I found it hard to set a scene in so few characters.
I'm not sure it's intentional, but I'm reading this as a kind of triangle: I, he, and she. A great foundation, very economically laid down, intentional or not. So, I think the language could match that economy. Maybe the dialogue could more acknowledge the tension of the triangle, even ironically?
I picked this one simply because I felt that it said the most. I'm a wordy person myself when it comes to writing, so I found it hard to set a scene in so few characters.
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure it's intentional, but I'm reading this as a kind of triangle: I, he, and she. A great foundation, very economically laid down, intentional or not. So, I think the language could match that economy. Maybe the dialogue could more acknowledge the tension of the triangle, even ironically?
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